I think I have got Lioness to the point where I really need to get some outside feedback.
Here’s a go at a blurb for same, see what y’all think:
As the daughter of a wealthy merchant lord, Veldy grew up rich and sheltered, spending her days weaving and making lace. When her father convinces her to marry a nomadic lion hunter, she embarks on a bridal journey that will carry her deep into the dry and windswept highlands — facing physical hardships she previously could never even have imagined. But Veldy has far more to overcome than a harsh climate and an extreme change in lifestyle. Her bridegroom has many enemies — and not all of them are entirely human.
Anyway, the vital statistics: Lioness is a ~160K word story (I’ve currently got it split up into a duology), set in an Africa-esque fantasy world. (The same world as Cantata and Pavane, but on the other side of the continent). It could probably be considered YA. It’s got action, “cultural stuff”, and, of course, a bit of romance. And I’m looking for people who would be willing to read it and tell me what they think of the pacing, and whether I have any plot holes or I didn’t explain something well enough — that kind of stuff.