Monday's Word Count: 26242
2291 words for Monday. When Bambi and Algernon start sniping at each other the words just flow. Now if only I could find the right dynamic for Serena and her Hworill Prince…
I've gotten comments on Cantata from 4 critters now. Two people who “got it” by the end of the first chapter, and two whom I lost completely. 50% would be an improvement from the last set of critiques, but how many people who got lost didn't bother to reply at all?
At least I've got a nice list of places where I'm being too subtle in my explanations (especially vocabularly-wise), so I know where to apply a bigger cluebat. As for the pov thingy, I just can't figure out how to be more obvious than to have one character explain to another what is going on. (Boyd says, 'You need to accept that some people are just never going to get it.')
I'm thinking of translating the name of Ikhsior's ship to make one (or two, someone put it on their list twice because it showed up in the text twice I assume) fewer “strange terms” for people to deal with, and the rest I can hopefully just make a little clearer.